Flash Fiction: Falling…
FALLING…
She looked up at the receding city and opened her arms wide. The wind roughly caressed her cheek and stung her eyes as the white inverted dome retreated from view, growing ever smaller among the clouds. Her golden halo of hair lashed wildly about her face as she faced the approaching ground once more. She fell through the heavens, her gown spread behind her like great white wings.
The thundering air in her ears whispered sweet seductions as it whipped past. She felt no fear, though she knew she could not fall forever. Her lover would never permit that. She smiled at his embrace and leaned back into his body as it coalesced around her. They joined hands, and with arms still spread wide, they flew together back to the great metropolis.
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I’ve been thinking about writing a story about falling from a floating city for awhile. This started out as something quite different which evolved over time. It took on a life of it’s own, though I realize it’s pretty short. I hope you like it.
September 25th, 2009 at 5:12 am
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September 25th, 2009 at 5:22 am
I did like it. Especially: She fell through the heavens, her gown spread behind her like great white wings.
Well done!
September 25th, 2009 at 5:33 am
an airy and ethereal quality – I think that is what you were after and achieved it!
September 25th, 2009 at 6:17 am
You created beautiful, ethereal images that I could see quite clearly in my mind!
September 25th, 2009 at 6:56 am
Great job of involving all the senses. The little details like the hair in the face, and the thundering of the air make it very vivid.
September 25th, 2009 at 8:24 am
Lovely, though as someone afraid of falling I felt a little queasy.
September 25th, 2009 at 8:23 pm
Nice imagery. I want to know more about her lover though!
September 26th, 2009 at 5:30 pm
Short is good! I so aspire to write something like this, saying so much without too much. This gave me a very joyful feeling for them both.
September 27th, 2009 at 7:58 am
Excellent story. I love your word choices throughout.
September 28th, 2009 at 6:14 am
Very vivid, like watching a (very!) short movie
October 1st, 2009 at 5:23 pm
You painted the scene gorgeously. Very impressive.
October 2nd, 2009 at 6:47 am
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