Friday Flash: Rumplestilkstin
Rumplestilkstin
The Queen had but one bright spot in her life, and soon he would be gone forever.
As a young girl, her father had lied and bragged that she could spin straw into gold. The greedy King had overheard his subject’s drunken boast, and imprisoned the girl with one command – Spin gold by morning or die. The Queen remembered how she had sat at the spindle and wept bitterly for the life she would never lead.
But then the creature, a little man of light and shadow, had appeared from nowhere – like a miracle. He seemed to pity her misfortune and offered to aid her in her need. How could she know how high his price would be? How could she choose to do anything but live?
The creature had spun the straw throughout that night so many years ago. His fingers flew, and soon the cold gleam of gold replaced the musty straw. The air tasted of metal. Before the sun rose again, the little man had disappeared without a word.
The Queen still remembered the King’s delight with the night’s work. Instead of taking her life, the cruel King had taken her hand in marriage – an act he soon repented when he found she had no gift for gold. Over the years, he made her suffer for wasting his life on a common maid.
And yet, after years of pain, she had given birth to the child – the bright shining sun around which her life revolved. The King almost forgave her…
But then the little man returned.
The Queen wept bitterly as the gnarled little man snatched the squalling bundle from her arms. She turned her face into her husband’s chest, heaving great sobs at the loss of her beloved child.
“In three days’ time,” said the little man, his eyes filling with tears, “if you guess my name… I will return the child to you.”
The silent King wrapped his wife in his arms. His eyes shot daggers at the dwarfish figure scurrying into the shadows. All too soon, the child’s screams died with distance.
Once home, the little man removed his hood and hushed the child in his arms. “There, there,” he cooed, producing a bright golden rattle. The babe’s eyes lit up, and soon the creature’s cottage reverberated with the sound of childish laughter. The creature treated the child well, fed him sweets and all nature of good things for three days. Then he returned to the queen.
“Do you know my name?” he asked. His name was a secret, shrouded in mystery; and he did not fear her answer.
But then, he did not know of her spies. He did not how they had heard him sing the child to sleep, sing his own name – in the security of his home – as he promised to care for the child as his very own.
Now the moment for truth had come.
The Queen glanced once at the harsh face of her husband, again at the little man cradling her child in his arms, and answered, “No.” She washed the infant’s face with her tears when she kissed him one last time.
The little man turned and walked from the castle, humming a tune for the child. The Queen returned to her gilded prison, secure in the knowledge that at least her child was free.
The end
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February 3rd, 2012 at 10:52 pm
A great twist on the tale. The Queen had her revenge on the King, though at great personal cost.
As fine a lesson as the original tale sought to teach.
Nicely done.
February 3rd, 2012 at 11:52 pm
We always want better for our children than we have for ourselves. LOVE the twist!
February 4th, 2012 at 1:42 am
Ouch. Fun coming here again, Cathy, glad I saw this post!
February 4th, 2012 at 4:16 am
That’s a nice twist on the tale. I really liked it. A mother’s love knows no bounds. ^_^
February 4th, 2012 at 2:02 pm
Well, that was certainly an unexpected twist, it was one hell of a way to revenge on her greedy husband though.
February 4th, 2012 at 7:53 pm
The end was wrenching but made for a great tale.
February 4th, 2012 at 10:03 pm
Outstanding. I’m jealous of how you can weave another story out from an existing story like this. The twist makes me wonder what’s next; the genes will carry that cleverness into the next generation…
February 5th, 2012 at 12:27 am
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February 5th, 2012 at 6:43 am
Really nice tale, Catherine. I enjoyed the twist.
February 5th, 2012 at 12:11 pm
Now that’s unconditional love! Excellent twist on the classic tale Catherine!
February 5th, 2012 at 2:06 pm
I like the subtle foreshadowing of the careful way Rumplestilkstin takes care of the babe that hints at the twist in the end.
February 5th, 2012 at 4:35 pm
Excellent retelling with a twist! You do such a great job on these fairy tales!
February 6th, 2012 at 12:41 am
Nicely done twist on the old tale. I like it.
February 6th, 2012 at 4:36 am
Oh what a tangled web we weave.. a superb and original take on a very old tale. You are an expert storyteller.
February 6th, 2012 at 11:15 am
Interesting take on the story, and nice to see a pleasant Rumpelstiltskin instead of the usual figure we get to see!
February 8th, 2012 at 1:41 am
Regardless, the kid grows up in the 1%. Had it easy, I say!